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May 22, 2014 20:45:46 GMT -8
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Kit
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New Cat
May 22, 2014 20:44:54 GMT -8
via mobile
Post by robinsong on May 22, 2014 20:44:54 GMT -8
Name: CardinalSong Name Explanation: Her fur is red and feathery like a cardinal Age: Young adult(new warrior) Gender: She-cat Rank: Warrior Allegiance: WindClan Personality: Gentle, quiet, and merciful, but ferocious towards her enemies Appearance: (Is it okay if I don't include a picture? I'm on mobile) Dark red fur with a white chest and belly, golden amber eyes History: Lost both her parents in a violent storm, she's an only kit
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Jul 28, 2014 19:43:19 GMT -8
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Leader
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New Cat
May 23, 2014 0:10:03 GMT -8
Post by Spade♠ on May 23, 2014 0:10:03 GMT -8
There are a few things I would like to see fixed before she is accepted. Be sure that the suffix of her name isn't capitalized. And why is her suffix -song? Her age should be in moons, a new warrior is about 12-15 moons old. No picture is fine, but I would like it if you could edit one in if you're ever not on mobile. The title of the thread should be her name and Clan. Could you possibly flesh out her personality section a bit? You don't necessarily have to add traits, but just add in two or three sentences to describe what you already have. Once those things are fixed, I think she looks good :)
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